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 Dear Specific Scholarship or Specific Employer

It is a pleasure to write this letter of recommendation for ___________________.
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I have been asked to write this letter of recommendation for_________________.

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I met _____ in January 2002 in my First Year Experience course at Three Rivers Community college 
and X was a good student
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X was an outstanding student, in a class of his own.

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X participated in some class discussions.
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X was a leader in class discussions, contributing many insights.    I often looked to him when soliciting feedback on complex issues.
X was absolutely excellent in oral and written communication skills. He was articulate and always enthusiastic, gaining the respect and attention of his peers.
 (elaborate on skills in creative thinking, analysis, synthesis, clarity in expressing ideas, specific papers & oral reports, PowerPoint presentations…)

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 X got along  with his peers.
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X was highly regarded by his peers.  He attained their respect and admiration.
His maturity and demeanor earned their respect.

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X completed his assignments.
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X completed his homework assignments to perfection, often exceeding the specified requirements.  He was a professional in his work.  Occasionally assignments were submitted early.

 I recall one assignment, in particular, where students were required to do a 3-minute oral presentation.  X’s presentation was outstanding!  Not only did he relay the information clearly, but it was presented in an exciting format on PowerPoint. He captured the class’s attention and participation.  His oral communication skills are excellent.

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X was of good character.
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As an instructor, I appreciated X’s character.  She was always prompt and always there.  She was courteous, trustworthy, and conscientious.  She was dependable, one that could be counted upon.  She was always cheerful and upbeat, willing to assist others as needed.

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X was a good student.  He was respectful and attended most classes.  He would blend in nicely in any environment.
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 It was been a privilege to write this letter  of recommendation for ______.   She was an stellar student, a role model for others.  She was well respected by her peers and faculty alike.  She stands head and shoulders above the crowd.  Therefore, without any reservation, I highly recommend ________ for ___________.  She would be an outstanding representative of your institution.  Do not hesitate do contact me should you need additional information.

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 Sincerely

Louise N. Walkup
Adjunct Faculty

P.S. Were you an active participant in our college or community.
Can Community Service be discussed?